Wednesday, January 21, 2009

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Diffrent Life at Diffrent Time

There are many diffrence things between 46 years and right now. At that time, China was in a war time. Right now, China is very peace. After the new China was built, the population of China discreated a lot, so most families have several children. However, most families just have a child right now.
My father’s family has 3 children,and he is the oldest. He has one brother and one sister. He need to help to parents to suport the family and look after his brother and sister. When he was just 10years old, he began to earn money. It was very hard at that time, so he didn’t have enough time to study. Eventually, my father dropped out of his school and began to do business with his uncle.
For me, my childhood was happy. Even though my parents didn’t have time to look afer me, my grandma realy love me. The time I stayed with my grandma was more than with my parents in my childhood. I didn’t need to earn money, and I can play a lot. Because I’m the only one child of my family, I have the most attention. Everybody wants a good childhood for memery in the fulture, but it isn’t depend on you. It is depend on encironment. Although my father’s childhood was had, he still has some good memories. And I also have some unhappy things. But all of them are our valuable memory. We cannot forget it.

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  2. Good try at rewriting, but you still have a lot of grammar mistakes and incorrect changes.

    In addition, you have many spelling mistakes –when you post, it is a good idea to type in word first, spell check, and then copy and paste into your blog.

    Some notes:
    Same problem: “differenT things”
    “China is very peaceFUL.”
    discreated ????
    “most families HAD several children” –this is in the past
    “He needED to help”
    my grandma really loveD me
    “but it DOESN’T depend on you. It DEPENDS on…”

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